Um, ok. Was I too harsh?
| Submitted by kathycf on Mon, 2007-03-05 23:55 | ||
I don't know how well known it is that I like to read, ALOT. I also do a bit of writing (mostly sad poems that I am embarrased for most people to read...) So I belong to a forum for reading and writing. People can post their own personal short stories and poems if they like and elicit feedback from other members. This is something I came across today that was just...simply amazing! Quote:
The Trilogy There was more but I simply had to trim it away. kathycf wrote:
I don't wish to seem unkind, but the only thing that strikes me as "utterly amazing" about your piece is it's sheer incomprehensibility. It seems that you are trying out some sort of imitation of stream of consciousness. It may serve you better to hone your skills with more straight forward prose and when you master THAT to the best of your ability, then try to be more "creative". Even Faulkner and Joyce wrote prose that was straight forward and their steam of consciousness (although not hugely accessible) was not random nonsense words on a page....it did make sense after a fashion. So, what I really wanted to say was what a bunch of stale dog poo I thought that little "story" was, but I tried to be diplomatic. In my defense, the person was asking for feedback. I feel a bit bad about it, but not bad enough to edit my post. It is truly awful writing.... blogs: |
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I think you were remarkably diplomatic there Kath...
To me this quote looks more like the word salad that you often see in SPAM email in an attempt to foil anti-SPAM software (i.e. random snips of sentences grasped out of the ether to disguise ad links).
Word salad is a good way to describe it, Sharkull and one would need plenty of good salad dressing to make this mess go down. When I first read it I thought it was a joke. But having read the person's little background blurb that they give ("I worked for 7 years devising this new literary art form blah blah") I figured I might as well take it at face value, although I still have my suspicions that it is some sort of elaborate prank....
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Total absence of humor renders life impossible.
Colette
I agree with you Kathy cuz I have no idea what that person said.
you are so nice
You mean you can't see what a literary masterpiece this is?! What sort of dressing do you like on YOUR salad?
*giggle giggle*
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Total absence of humor renders life impossible.
Colette
He has a lot of confidence ;).
Jag är en gud i sängen is my literary masterpiece... I just need to learn how to pronounce it one day :P.
Just remember to give credit where credit is due, fb.
On the subject of giving credit... the term "word salad" was mentioned on a recent episode of Boston Legal by James Spader's character. I thought it a bit more descriptive (and kind) than "bunch of stale dog poo"... :P
You guys crack me up.
Now Sharkull, I could have been even more descriptive and flamboyant but settled on stale dog poo as the least um..."subjectively descriptive" term that I could think of...
:P
*still laughing*
Actually it is worth noting that "word salad" is often used to describe the verbal or written ramblings of people afflicted with schizophrenia.
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Total absence of humor renders life impossible.
Colette
Of course, there are only a few crazy swedes that would learn me to say such things ;).
Crazy Swedes? Isn't that like saying sugary sugar?
Sort of redundant....
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Total absence of humor renders life impossible.
Colette
What the flip? Remember who owns the red button!
Aw, we just love to tease you solly because you are so teasable.
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Total absence of humor renders life impossible.
Colette
/me paints kathy's nose red and pushes it.
I know, it is my own fault really.
Anyways.. that text was a bunch of hogwash!
Indeed, it is awful. The next time I am feeling bad about my writing skills, I am going to remember this little stale pile of whatever and feel a little better...
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Total absence of humor renders life impossible.
Colette